Hey, uh, as the original author of The Collar... I would've maybe liked a heads up about this? I'm not here to ask you to take it down, or anything, I just think it might've been polite to ask me about a game that you literally state is a sequel to one of mine - especially as I'm still active on the site.

I noticed collar was mispelled as colar in one page.

The presmide seems very similar to the Collar but with a few changes so I am interested in where this will go.

Right now there are no choices for the player to make, so the game right now is a few pages of story, setting up the premise of the game.  

Thats all I can really critique about the content that is currently available.  I'm interested in seeing more.

Seems more like a remake of The Collar so far than a sequel. Grammar is good, pages are rather short. Will be interesting to see where this goes.

There is nothing here yet. No choices, 11 pages of text that are mostly one or two short paragraphs per page.